Score: 10

"Tight flow once again"

submission: Best McRapper

date: December 27, 2009

You've got good flow, rythm, delivery, and a lot of snappy lines in this one. I feel like you've found a good sound and are putting thought into what you write, which is wicked. So, good job on another track!

Now some critical thoughts. The lines stand alone very well, but I couldn't tie it all together and get what you're trying to say overall. I think the song would stand stronger if you gave it some structure. That doesn't mean add a chorus or anything else specific, just be aware of where it starts, where it ends, and how it gets there. As well, some distinct dynamics would be nice: highs and lows in energy, changes in the pace of the flow, etc.

Yup. As always with my criticism, take it and use it or call me a fool, either is cool with me, haha. Keep dropping these, it's always a pleasure to listen.

Score: 10

"Werd"

submission: HW - Haywyre 200

date: December 24, 2009

Good shit man, here's to another 200!

Score: 10

"Yay"

submission: FF | Laura

date: December 23, 2009

It sounds good at 0:40 when the sample goes into the underwater feel. I feel like some sporadic solo brass samples would sound good with this beat.

Score: 10

"This makes me smile"

submission: FF | Bittersweet

date: December 14, 2009

Time goes on and I continue to dig your style and choices. Kudos Mr. double F!

Score: 10

"Sounds like an old green day song"

submission: 7 and a Half of ROCK

date: December 11, 2009

I think you've put together something solid here. It sounds good, and you're definitly getting good at putting Fruity Loops compositions together. There are a few things that bugged me though:
-I can't really hear the base drum (try EQing the different drum parts seperately and also EQing your guitar).
-I don't get a general sense of the dynamics, ie the song doesn't build or fall in energy, it just kinda stays in the same relative place after the guitar comes in
-add more instruments!!

For your first forray into Fruity Loops it is definitly a solid foray, so keep on working at it! I also really dig composing some of the song in Fruity loops and then playing a real guitar over it, it's a cool way to do things. Good job senor!

Score: 10

"Solid Verse"

submission: 7000 Speaks [7000]

date: December 11, 2009

I'd say you've got to work on keeping the flow going and getting more comfortable with when you need to breath. For the first time I've heard you rap though it's definitly good work! Keep spittin these lines, and when you get the time keep poppin out them smooth beats!

Score: 10

"Really cool"

submission: Faces - Bisuto

date: December 10, 2009

Too short, but an excellent vibe going. Good stuff!

Score: 10

"So good!"

submission: Sidestreet Scuffle

date: December 10, 2009

It's too bad the game fell apart man, it would have given this wicked song the publicity it deserves!

Score: 10

"Beautiful!"

submission: Phillip - 6 The Lonely Life

date: December 9, 2009

The recording quality is the only thing bringing this down for me. The piece itself is done very well. Invest in a better mic, you play well enough to deserve one! Thanks for bringing quality stuff like this to Newgrounds!

Score: 10

"Superb!"

submission: [Kiss Our Asses]

date: December 9, 2009

Oh top of the line good sir, top of the line! It truly is excellent to hear another jim dandy peice of music! I applaud and congratulate you!

I think we should try to squeeze as many MC's onto this song as possible. A show of hands as to who agrees?